I love it. The only peeve I have is that since this is based off of Azami from Uzumaki, she doesn't look as oddly beautiful as she does in the manga. Anyone else reading this, I'll explain. SPOILERS: In Chapter 3 Azami started out as this beautiful girl with a moon shaped scar on her forehead. Said scar had the uncanny ability to draw boys in, whether she liked them or not. Part of why she went nuts to begin with was because Shuichi was the only one to reject her and for legit reasons too. Although the scar was slowly eating away at her body starting with her forehead turning her into the spiral of the chapter, she was still able to maintain that supernatural beauty. To the point where another guy wouldn't leave her alone because he felt naturally drawn to her. Granted in a final attempt to steal Shuichi, both her and the guy stalking her died a horrible death.
That said, it's your piece and it's more of a nitpick from me as a fellow fan.